With the increasing popularity of computers and calculators, student literacy is decreasing dramatically. What are the positive and negative effects the progress of science and technology has brought about? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

We live in
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
world
that
Correct word choice
where
show examples
technology
and science
is
Change the verb form
are
show examples
thriving dramatically,
actually
Add a comma
,actually
show examples
we have needed using
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
technology
in our
life
. But how do we adapt our
life
with
Change preposition
to
show examples
technology
which
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
positive effects on our
life
, especially among the
students
.
Change the punctuation
?
show examples
I will give some details accurately about the topic. Today
technology
help
Change the verb form
helps
show examples
us to improve our
life
Replace the word
lives
show examples
and get information easily.
For
example
Add a comma
,example
show examples
the
internet
is the largest library which we can use of it and
seeking
Wrong verb form
seek
show examples
information easily
and
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
also
it can
helps
Wrong verb form
help
show examples
students
to thrive
their
Change preposition
in their
show examples
education. But some parents oppose using
technology
, particularly using the
internet
because they believe their
children
could not enough concentrate on the lessons and it is possible to harm their future
furthermore
, they say
technology
such
as
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
some websites on the
internet
have inconvenient concepts that it can be harmful
for
Change the preposition
to
show examples
children
. To be fair, I slightly disagree about thinking parents who have a negative perspective about
technology
. Nowadays we could not live without
technology
and
also
today
children
have suitable facilities that can help them to
increasing
Change the verb form
increase
show examples
education
than
Correct quantifier usage
more than
show examples
past
children
.
For example
in
Change preposition
during
show examples
period
Add an article
a period
the period
show examples
of COVID-19
that
Correct word choice
when
show examples
most
students
were deprived of going to
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
school and actual presence with teachers and other
students
, actually
Add an article
a smartphone
show examples
smartphone
Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
show examples
, social media, and especially the
internet
helped them to continue their studies. In
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
other word,
technology
caused, living us not to be stopped.
As a result
, I believe the first step before using
technology
, we should learn to use
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
them and
also
we must train correctly to our
children
. Caution: we must give awareness to the
children
before they use
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
them.
Submitted by ramin.rayati91 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: