People today spend less and less time interacting with other people in their neighborhood and this has a negative impact on communities. What are the possible causes and solutions to this problem?

There are a number of problems stemming from
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phenomenon and some solutions could be suggested to tackle
this
issue. To start with the negative effects of less
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with
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neighborhood
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, perhaps the most plausible one is that it
separate
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people.
This
probably derives from the fact that more and more individuals in
todays
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era are
overly-occupied
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with their tight working and studying schedules.
As a result
, they are not able to pay enough attention to family, society, environment and nurturance matters. In fact ,
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research has recently shown that the problem of isolation is receiving the least attention both from
government
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and
people
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.
However
, a few measures can be taken to mitigate the problem of less
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and improve the current situation
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this
case. First of all, one of the most effective measures to remedy
this
issue is that government can arrange campaigns in
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and
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the workplace
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workplace
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to alleviate all of the problems that are likely to result from less
interacting
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can be solved and prevented from exacerbating. In conclusion , the problems that are caused by less
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are both social and physical ,
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they could be addressed by the collaborative action of both parents and
government
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the government
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.
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