Shopping was considered as daily routine work in earlier times; however, recently it has become a leisure activity for some people. In my opinion, this trend has more negative impact on the public than positive.

In the past decade,
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shopping
was a daily work for everyone;but now it is a spare time activity for individuals.In my point of
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it has
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instead
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because it
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took
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plenty of time and money. On the one hand, the more we shopped the more we spend.To be
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precise
, in previous
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people always purchase for need but now
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fashionable
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houshold
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household
expendeture
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expenditure
is slightly lower than leisure
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expenditure
expenditures
.Now they spend most of their money on
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fancy
objects.Eventually, they are not able to
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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