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The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #governments #space #programmes #services #schools #hospitals
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it is sometimes argued that government should spend more money on vital public services
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 as schools and hospitals rather than spend on
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 programmes, I agree with
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 should pay more funds on public services. on the one hand ,
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 should spend money on
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 projection ,because it can bring many advantages.
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, nowadays the earth we lived on has been polluted heavily and
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 exploration can help scientists to find another living
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 maybe we can livikuv the future.
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,
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 exploration can leacepromote scientific and technology ,and
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,
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 programmes are conducive to exploring new energy. ho and time,and
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 is too dangerous for astronauts to search,
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 the results of
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 research do not benefit normal people in our daily lives so
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 and public finance will be under a heavy burden and great .
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 give priority to solving vital public services problems
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 as schools and hospitals.
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,
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 can invest more budgets in infrastructure to construct more bais\ facilities ,because it can improve service quality.
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,education and medical treatment
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 face a huge problem,
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 ,
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 should give financial support to children in a popular area,in order to make sure every child has access to education. particularly, medical technology is still underdeveloped,
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 have a responsibility to ensure people are healthy. bu in conclusion,my view is that
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 should attach great importance to guaranteeing the stability and prosperity of society.
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