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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching younger children) To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, students face
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 variety of unpaid compulsory
programmes
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 at
school
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 that they needed to compete
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 moving forward. I strongly agree that these activities must be a part of
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school
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 curriculum before graduation. The first reason why unpaid compulsory subjects are important for
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the younger
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 generation
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 is that these
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 build character. By engaging
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 different kinds of learnings outside
school
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 premises, they will gain experiences and skills that can be used for career growth.
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, participating in a medical mission and working for a charity even unpaid will boost their
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 as a person.
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, even at a younger
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 they can be able to extend help to the needy and give love to the community without thinking
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 personal gain.
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Secondly
, young
people
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 will be able to meet many
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 in their lives by volunteering
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 various
programmes
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. Older
people
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 may influence them to view the world
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different
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 perspective by teaching them to sacrifice time
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 public
service
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.
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, an undergraduate pupil may join a senior club that
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 younger children on the streets to read and write. They may
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 give a little of their money to give food to the poor and needy. By doing these services, students will be able to understand the true meaning of sacrifice and public
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. In conclusion, I do believe that unpaid community
service
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 must be part of high
school
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programmes
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 because it will develop the skills and experiences of pupils and widen their perspective in extending
service
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 to needy
people
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unpaid
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching younger children
  • valuable learning experiences
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • problem-solving
  • compassion
  • empathy
  • connect
  • positive impact
  • mandatory
  • personal development
  • social development
  • interested
  • motivated
  • volunteer
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