The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons whare relevant.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons whare relevant.
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The line graph describes vehicle
theft
rates
measured in thousands in four different countries namely Britain,
Sweden
,
France
and Canada from 1990 to 1999.
Overall
, most of the transport
are
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stolen in Great Britain throughout the years.
However
,
France
and
Sweden
had fluctuations over the periods.
Conversely
,
Sweden
shows an upward trend. With regards to
the
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Britain, at the start of the period, there
was
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were
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nearly 17000
vechiles
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vehicles
thefts
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theft
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attempts are made. Later on, the
theft
rates
increased steadily for three years and it attained its peak in 1993 After that, it faced a sudden decline around16000 by 1994.
Likewise
, the
rates
are starts to increase and
peak
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at 20000 in 1997. At
last
,
at the end
of the period
although
it starts to decline it finished with a higher percentage of
theft
rates
.
Similarly
,
Sweden
shows a gradual rise from the beginning of the year 1990 which is around 7000. It continues to increase till 1996 and after that, it remained in a steady state for
further
two years
as
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at
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13000.
Finally
, it ends at 14000 in the year
of
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1999.
On the other hand
, Canada and
France
were the countries with
low
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a low
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proportion of stolen vehicles. In 1990, 6000
theft
incidents are noted in 1990 Canada.
Similarly
,
France
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France's
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rate was 1 thousand lower in that same period. Both countries faced various trends. But, in the end, Both showed the same amount of 6000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "similarly".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words theft, rates, sweden, france with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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