The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between march 1993 and march 1999
This
line chart depicts the unemployed people ratio in two different countries: the United States and Japan
in March from 1994 to 1999. It is clear from the graph that, in this
country a massive number of unemployed workers. Accounting to what is shown,to
beginning in Change preposition
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Japan
in the first period a tiny percentage of worker forces by 2.3.After that, the rate become
increased from 2.5 to 3.5 in three years from March . Change the verb form
becomes
Although
a drop in 1996 ,while
become fluctuate over three years. But between March 1998 and ,1999 the ratio of unemployment increased sharply at the end
of the period. In other countries the percentage of workers was 7.5 throughout the three years it has become from 7.0 to 5.5. After ,that the proportion drop in 1995 and 1998 was the same level in Japan
. To sum up
we could say that between 1998 to 1999 this
country had the same period of unemployment 4.5 in the United States while
4.4 in Japan
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