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Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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Nowadays, technology has become one of the tools most important for
people
. Adults and children are involved in working and studying to be conventions of easy access. There are pros and cons that I will discuss in
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However
, I think that if it is a balance, it will be
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work
 for
people
 and the planet. Working and studying from home can be attractive at the beginning,
in contrast
, it can develop self-isolation. causing
mental
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the mental
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problem
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 in those who are spending most of the day in front of a computer screen.
For example
,
people
 are losing social skills
as
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 sharing, tolerance, personal relationships,
confidence
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, among others. Even though they are constantly interacting with others, they become lazy to go out and enjoy
time
 with physical social groups.
As a result
, mental illnesses have been increasing. Self-discipline can reduce the
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 for work and study. Learning how to manage their
time
 and
sing
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 up for presential activities are
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an option
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option
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 to cut off online tasks and interact with real
people
.
On the other hand
, being at home makes life simple,
people
 don't have to worry about waking up
ontime
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on time
,
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 ready to go to work or study. inside of
this
, they have more
time
 to interact with their family member.
As a result
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they build
stronger
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a stronger
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relationship
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relationships
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 with those that are living in the same house. In conclusion, having the option to be at home either working or studying have positive benefits for those who want to have their own
time
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • telecommuting
  • work-life balance
  • environmental impact
  • socio-economic background
  • face-to-face interaction
  • interpersonal skills
  • productivity
  • reliable technology
  • quality of education
  • flexible schedule
  • cost savings
  • commuting
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