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In many countries, people wear more western-style clothes (suits and jeans) than their traditional clothes. What is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Squabbling over western-style and traditional
clothes
 is interminable in today's aeon. Controversy exists that wearing more western
clothes
 may
lose
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 in the touch with culture and tradition. In
this
 monograph, I will elaborate on both the beneficial and adverse aspects of
this
 trend and
thus
 lead to a logical conclusion. First of all,
people
 are very comfortable in western
clothes
 including workspaces due for a plethora of reasons.
In addition
, the majority of
people
 are likely to wear western
clothes
 like jeans and T-shirts in the summer reasons.
Furthermore
, more stylish collections are available in the shopping market at cheaper prices. They can wear a combination of dresses on different days. Another factor to consider is that some companies like implemented a policy of not wearing traditional
clothes
. Needless to say, all these points stand in good stead.
Moreover
, western-style clothing determines individuals to feel a sense of unity with nations all over the world. Eventually, these benefits make
this
 tendency advantaged for society.
On the other hand
,
people
 are not likely to wear traditional
clothes
. To probe more deeply,
indian
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people
known
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 for
rich
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 in culture. They are not following
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the tradition
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tradition
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traditional
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 dress
code
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codes
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 inside
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the temple
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temple
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temples
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 and
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at festival
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festival
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.
As a result
, they losing in touch with culture and tradition. In conclusion, in the age trend addicted
clothes
, it seems that local attire is old-fashion.
Nevertheless
, casual attracts
people
 to feel comfortable
as well as
 practical and,
therefore
, it is considered
as
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a positive tendency.
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