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Today many people do not realize how important the natural world is. Why is this? How can people learn more about the importance of the natural world?

#people #world #importance
Nowadays, some
people
 do not realize the importance of the
environment
 and do not care about
nature
. As
nature
 is the source of our all needs, humans should have
the
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knowledge of it. In
this
essay
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 I will discuss the reasons
of
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this
 ignorance and how
people
 can learn more about
world
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.
To begin
 with, there are some reasons why
people
 do not realize the importance of the natural world. First of all,
people
 do not pay much attention to the
environment
 and do not take care of
nature
 properly. They throw
plastic
 bottles and
bags
 wherever they can and it is damaging our planet.
Also
, many factories produce goods that
affecting
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 to
environment
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such
 as air pollution and water contamination.
For instance
,
plastic
bags
 and bottles after
use
 are thrown into the ocean
after
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which leads to marine pollution.
Second
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 reason is
people
’s
luck
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lack
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 of awareness about the
environment
 and product
use
.
In other words
, they know little about how their daily activities affect
nature
 and sometimes they are not able to recycle the products.
As a result
, their
behavior
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 negatively affects the natural world and can lead to problems for
future
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the future
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generation
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.
On the other hand
, awareness
and
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importance
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the importance
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 of
nature
 can be spread to
people
 by governments.
Firstly
,
government
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the government
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 can organize a
nature
 help camp around the city and program to spread awareness about recycling and avoiding the
use
 of non-ecological materials.
For instance
, in some countries
of
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 Europe
government
 ban
plastic
bags
 and companies changed packing
bags
 from
plastic
 to paper.
Secondly
,
government
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 should impose fines for the
use
 of
plastic
 and products that are harmful to
nature
. In conclusion,
people
 and
government
 should do their part to prevent
the
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environmental problems, because it is important for
our
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future generations.
In addition
 to
this
,
people
 need to be more aware and make the right steps to preserve
the
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nature
.
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