In some countries, adults living with their parents after graduating or even after finding a job. Do the advantages of the outweigh the disadvantages?

Needless to say, some people are preferable to stay with their
parents
after becoming financially independent
due to
a plethora of reasons. In
this
monograph, I will weigh up both beneficial and adverse aspects of
this
thread and
thus
lead to a logical conclusion. First of all,
parents
are equal to god, they stand with us in all ups and downs.
Therefore
, some
adults
are likely to pay back the same equal amount of love to their
parents
by taking care of their health, and medical checks and buying all the necessary items.
Furthermore
, staying with your
parents
can save a lot of money on daily expenses in terms of food, internet bills, rental fees and many more.
In addition
,
adults
don't wanna live a solitary life.
Hence
, it's apparent why many young people are living with their
parents
.
On the other hand
, young people are not able to experience
independence
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life
to
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living with their
parents
.
In addition
,
adults
are
dependence
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on their
parents
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parent's
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decision
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when they are facing any hard situation. In some countries like
india
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,
srilanka
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where
adults
are always living in the shadow of their
parent
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, they are not able to make
own
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decision
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of
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their life.
Therefore
, moving out of their
parents
which
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helps
adults
to
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skill
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like financial management,
cooking
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. In recapitulation,
i
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iterate that totally depends on
individuals
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choices.
However
, in terms of
finance
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terms, living with
parents
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our parents
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are more
pros
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,
in
addition
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we can able to spend
the
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quality
of
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time with
parents
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our parents
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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