Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, most of the
products
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all over the world and
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growth
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of technology and transportation. Because of those,
companies
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export their
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to get more market share and
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development
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leads to countries
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becoming like each other.
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has own advantages and disadvantages, I think
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side
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of
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side
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development
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is small
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can’t compete with big
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because they already have market share.
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individuals prefer to import goods rather than
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run
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,
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is because of the costs and the materials that make
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the price
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of
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being
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high. So,
people
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prefer to buy
cheapest
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one
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.
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, in Iran,
people
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prefer to buy TVs with
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the brand
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of Sony,
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rather than domestic
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price
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the price
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and the
quality
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of domestic are too high and
have
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low
quality
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. The positive
side
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development
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which I think
it
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is better is that in
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situation
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between
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high
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because they want to get more market share and sell more
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to
people
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,
companies
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, try harder to use
high
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quality
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material
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and
newest
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technologies in their
products
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,
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, they try to keep their price low. Another
benefits
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of
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development
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is
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that individuals have
variety
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a variety
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of choices to buy something,
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, if a person wants to buy a new phone, he/she has lots of choices with
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of prices to buy
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phone for him/herself.
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,
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development
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has
own
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its own
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positive and negative
effect
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, but I think the positive
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is outweigh than
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the negative
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side
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.
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situation is a
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game for
people
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because they have access to
lot
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a lot
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of
products
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with
variety
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a variety
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of
quality
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and prices.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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