The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
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The line graph compared the proportion of travellers visiting four famous places in Brighton when they went to England.
Overall
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,
while
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the percentage of tourists to the Pier and Pavilion increased from 1980 to 2010, that for Art Gallery
as well as
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the Festival dropped. In 1980, Pier attracted only 10% of the number of visitors to England, but the proportion for Pavilion was much higher, at about 24%. Between 1980 and 2000, Pier witnessed a significant fluctuation in the data of visitors before growing to 21% in 2010. Meanwhile, the figure for Pavilion reached its peak of 49% in 1995,
then
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dropped considerably to 30%
at the end
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of
this
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period.
By contrast
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, approximately 20% of tourists who went to the UK visited Art Gallery in 1980,
whereas
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the Festival had the most visitors, which accounted for 30% of the country's travellers. 5 years later, the Art Gallery's figure rocketed to 38%, but
this
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fell sharply to merely 8%, being the least attractive destination among 4 attractions in 2010.
Besides
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, the percentage of people who participated in the Festival, which just declined very modestly by 2%, remained quite stable after the period of 30 years.
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