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The charts below give information about the amount of electricity used.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the amount of electricity used.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph outlines the typical daily demand for
electricity
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 in
winter
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 and summer. All trends exhibit positive growth, albeit at different rates. Meanwhile, the lion’s
share
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 of the pie chart was allotted to the
electricity
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 consumption for the heating room and water in
winter
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, which contradicts
modest
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 proportions of household appliances. The
electricity
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 consumption in
winter
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 jumped back and forth to a shade of 5000
units
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 continuously and
finally
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 stayed at 40000
units
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 over the first 15
hours
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. After a slight lull lasted for 6
hours
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afterward
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, it notably accelerated a shade of 7000
units
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 and reached the highest point before falling back to starting point for the rest of the day.
Electricity
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 provision in summer remained stable at a shy of 15000
units
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 from 0 to 21
hours
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,
although
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 there was a remarkable acceleration from 15000
units
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 to 20000
units
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 between 13
hours
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 to 14
hours
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 becoming the lion’s
share
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 of that in summer. The positive correlation with the predominance rose a shy of 20000
units
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 from 21 until the end of the day. Regarding the partitioned pie chart, the heating rooms and heating water accounted for the lion’s
share
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 of the
electricity
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 consumption in
winter
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 (52.5%). Lighting, TV, radio, and vacuum cleaners, food mixers, electric tools remained a positive correlation (15%). The
share
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 of remainders contributed 17% of the pie chart.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, winter, share, units, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity consumption
  • Kilowatt-hours (kWh)
  • Energy demand
  • Power grid
  • Renewable energy sources
  • Non-renewable energy sources
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Conservation efforts
  • Industrial sector
  • Residential sector
  • Commercial sector
  • Fluctuation
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Efficiency improvements
  • Seasonal variation
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