Some people believe that it is important to spend a lot of money on family celebrations. While others think it is a waste of money discuss both views.

Most
of
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the
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people
like to enjoy their free
time
by spending
time
with their family members and some stated that they don’t like to invest
for
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family
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function
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. In
this
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I will discuss both views of family events. nowadays,
people
spend busy
lifestyle
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with their day-to-day work, and they have missed their lovely
time
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times
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due to
their work life.
Therefore
, most
of
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the
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people
arrange their free
time
for
family
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gathering
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at least once a year. It makes the bond very strong with each other.
Also
, family function helps to abandon the work stress at that
time
. As an example, my uncle works in
army
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, and he comes home once in 6 months. So, he is missing his family members all the
time
.
Then
he always
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to
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have
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get
together with
his family and
love
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to share his experiences with all.
Then
, he believes, it makes memory with his family members.
On the other hand
, some
people
think it is not necessary to have
family
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function
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and they believe, it is just a waste of
time
and
money
.
Therefore
, they invest their
money
on
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charity
instead
of doing celebrations.
Also
, those
people
think to save their
money
for
future
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to make their lifestyle
due to
the changes
of
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modern society and
the
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inflation. The other few percentages donate their
money
for
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those who need
the
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basic
utilizations
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.
Then
they think it would be
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great thing that
human
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can do for
world
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. In conclusion,
this
topic gets the most controversial among the
people
because of different perspectives that everyone
carryon
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cherish
  • nurture
  • strengthen
  • bond
  • create memories
  • enjoyment
  • sense of belonging
  • reconnect
  • unite
  • traditions
  • create traditions
  • financial burden
  • priorities
  • moderation
  • budget
  • frugal
  • extravagant
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