Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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at
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high schools
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that
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one of
them
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is how to become a
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godparent
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.The schools try to reduce
the
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domestic violence by teaching
children
how to be
a
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normal good
parent
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parents
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for
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own
children
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definitely
agree with
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will try to bring
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relevant examples from my own experience.
Firstly
, I would like to talk about usually
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families
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parents
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children
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their normal childhood. Both
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love each other,and they an example of warm relationships between all family members.
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the
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those
families
will be
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a good parent
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parents
in the future.
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the
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children
that are growing up in not good
families
, there is present
for instance
either
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physical
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or
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mental
vilence
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violence
toward
children
or
mother
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the mother
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will think that
this
is normal
behavior
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behaviour
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and will continue in
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manner in their own
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and
families
.
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social media and
impact
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the impact
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that it makes on
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behaviour
of our
childrens
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children
. They are exposed to
the
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content that harms
to
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the mental
halth
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health
of our
children
and they try to use
this
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knowledge
for
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daily life, and not always
it
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finished
sucssefully
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successfully
. To reduce these events the
goverment
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government
try to introduce
the
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new subjects and innovations into
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program.
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they try to combine the
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parents
and
children
in
those program
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.
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,
parents
take a part in
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school travel or excursions. And it is working, that
families
are
more happy
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and
childern
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children
grow in good
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atmosphere
. In
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we have to be involved more
then
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usually into
life
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the life
a life
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of our
children
and be a good example for the next generation.
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Therefore
only
this
way can
bild
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build
a god society.
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