Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people argue about the possibility to choose the
subjects
in university by
students
. Some people consider that
students
should have freedom in
this
case,
others
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prefer to entrust
this
right to professionals. In my point of
view
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the student should choose the minor part of
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the
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subjects
their
education
consists
, the
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rest part of the program needs to be compiled by methodists. Following new trends more and more universities let
students
themselves
to
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collect their educational programs by subject. There are some problems with
this
approach – not all
students
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motivated to study
the
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complicated
subjects
and could choose more light ones to study.
Moreover
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not all
students
can understand the coherence of studying where the knowledge must be get in the right order.
For example
, to get quality
education
in
the
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particular sphere of exact science, like astronomy, a student needs to have enough knowledge in math, physics, etc. From my
perspective
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it is possible to form
of
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their own university program, but mostly in the initial stage of
the
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education
and mostly with professions, not related to an exact science. It could help them to keep their interest
in to
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process
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the process
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. But at some point in
education
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a quantity of choosing
subjects
need to be almost all excluded. Even
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so
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some
students
want to learn additional programs, it must not influence
to
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general
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the general
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course
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and they can study
its
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like facultative. In my view the
students
could
to
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be included in forming programs on the first step,
further
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it needs to be done by specialists. In
short
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this
method allows to safe the interests of
students
and does not let to produce gaps in knowledge. I hope a lot of countries will follow
this
approach in the future.
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