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People in many countries do not wear their traditional costume. Some argue that they would forget their history and tradition. Do you agree or disagree?

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it is common knowledge that nowadays the majority of
people
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 do not wear their traditional costumes. there are many
people
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 who assume that not wearing their traditional costume can lead to forgetting their
history
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 and tradition. In
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 I will discuss both views and after
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 I will give my own opinion. on the one hand in many countries we can see that
people
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 do not wear their national
clothes
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, they wear what they long to wear, to be
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due to
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 it, many
people
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 can forget their
history
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 and
traditions
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, we can see many
people
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 who do not even know their
history
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, and if we ask them some questions related to
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 they will just say that they have no clue. and from my point of view if a person does not know his own
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 he can not know its
traditions
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.
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, it does not matter what
clothes
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people
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 prefer,
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 every country has its national
clothes
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 but not all
people
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 wear that
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 it does not mean they are forgetting their own
history
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 and tradition, they maybe do not feel free in those
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,
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 me, I do not wear traditional costumes
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 I know my country's
history
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 very well and I indeed adore it,
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 I know
traditions
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 of my country.
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 there are
people
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 who wear traditional costumes
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 they do not know anything about their
traditions
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 and
history
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. In conclusion from my point of view it does not matter what
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people
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 prefer to wear, wearing
clothes
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 that you desire has nothing to do with forgetting
history
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 and tradition
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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