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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.
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The diagrams above illustrate the amount of
electricity
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 produced in
Germany
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 and
France
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 by all types of sources and reusables in 2009.
Overall
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, the main energy sources in
Germany
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 and
France
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 are different because in
Germany
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 conventional thermal was used a lot more than nuclear, and it is the opposite in
France
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.
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, renewable
electricity
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 contributes about the same amount in both countries. Generally, conventional thermal usage was the source that takes more than half of the percentage of
electricity
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 in
Germany
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, 59.60%,
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 nuclear and renewables appeared to be similar with 23% and 17.4% respectively.
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, in
France
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, nuclear power dominantly took up the pie chart, 76%, with the other 2 sources sharing the rest of the chart, 10.3% for conventional thermal and 13.7% for reusable
electricity
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, which is not quite different from
Germany
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.
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, renewable
electricity
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 was contributed mainly by biomass, 39.9%, followed by wind, which was slightly lower 36.9%, in
Germany
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. Whilst, in
France
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, those were dominantly made up of hydroelectric, 80.5%, continued with wind and biomass, 10.5% and 8.1% respectively. Meanwhile, hydroelectric only took about 17.7% in
Germany
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 and little contribution from solar power, 6.1%.
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, both countries' renewables were not contributed by geothermal energy.

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