In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of problems and what measures could be taken to solve them

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These days,one of the most controversial issues around the world is obesity and

overweight

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being overweight

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in some

speciefic

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specific

countries.

Besides

,lack of the healthy activities is

other

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reason that some nations are

concern

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about.In

this

essay

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I will explain about reasons behind the issue and I will give some possible solutions. It is well-established fact that,

although

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fresh

food

and homemade

food

have

greater

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health

benefit

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benefits

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,many

people

would rather eat fast

food

or junk

food

.The reason is that

people

have no enough time to prepare healthy and organic

food

In addition

,most

people

work in

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building

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buildings

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and they sit on

the

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chair for more than 8 hours

with out

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any movement.Another

further

reason that should be mentioned is that

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some

people

have no access to fitness

club

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clubs

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because some of them are far from their

home

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homes

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or workplace.All in

all

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can be

cause

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the cause

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of obesity and poor diet that lead to

unhealthy

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an unhealthy

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lifestyle. There are many measures that can be taken in order to solve

this

problem.first of all

governments

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government's

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duties in

this

vital

issues

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issue

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however

,should not be taken lightly.They should increase

people

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people's

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awarness

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awareness

about the healthy lifestyle and consequences of being overweight with produce some appropriate

program

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programs

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not only on the tv but

also

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social media.They should

also

provide

sport

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facilities in

different

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part

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parts

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of the city for free to encourage

people

to use

sport

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facilties

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facilities

to be more healthy and fit.

To sum up

,prevention is always better than cure.And government and

people

should take

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apply

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even small steps to

imrove

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improve

this

condition and just with the cooperation of both we can gain the desired result.

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2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

260 words

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary
obesity
overweight
physical activity
sedentary lifestyle
exercise
unhealthy diet
fast food
urbanization
modernization
stress
awareness
education
government intervention
policies
promotion
sports
fitness programs
health education
taxation
public transportation
infrastructure
parks
recreational spaces

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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of problems and what measures could be taken to solve them

Fully explain your ideas

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