In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of problems and what measures could be taken to solve them

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These days,one of the most controversial issues around the world is obesity and

overweight

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in some

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specific

countries.

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,lack of the healthy activities is

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reason that some nations are

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essay

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I will explain about reasons behind the issue and I will give some possible solutions. It is well-established fact that,

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fresh

food

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and homemade

food

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have

greater

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health

benefit

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,many

people

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would rather eat fast

food

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or junk

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.The reason is that

people

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have no enough time to prepare healthy and organic

food

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work in

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building

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buildings

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and they sit on

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chair for more than 8 hours

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any movement.Another

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reason that should be mentioned is that

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some

people

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have no access to fitness

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because some of them are far from their

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or workplace.All in

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can be

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of obesity and poor diet that lead to

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an unhealthy

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lifestyle. There are many measures that can be taken in order to solve

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problem.first of all

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duties in

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vital

issues

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,should not be taken lightly.They should increase

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people

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awarness

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awareness

about the healthy lifestyle and consequences of being overweight with produce some appropriate

program

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programs

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not only on the tv but

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social media.They should

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provide

sport

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facilities in

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part

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of the city for free to encourage

people

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to use

sport

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facilties

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facilities

to be more healthy and fit.

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,prevention is always better than cure.And government and

people

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should take

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even small steps to

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improve

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condition and just with the cooperation of both we can gain the desired result.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary
obesity
overweight
physical activity
sedentary lifestyle
exercise
unhealthy diet
fast food
urbanization
modernization
stress
awareness
education
government intervention
policies
promotion
sports
fitness programs
health education
taxation
public transportation
infrastructure
parks
recreational spaces

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