The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

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The line graph depicts the CO2 emission in several countries which were surveyed in metric tonnes from 1967 to 2007 decennially.

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, all of the numbers indicate positive trends,

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only cases in the United Kingdom and Sweden dropped continuously. In detail, in 1967, the emission of CO2 in Italy revealed 4

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rose dramatically to approximately 6

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in 1977, and continue to shoot up until below 8

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in 2007.

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Portugal which had a sharp shot up from approximately 1

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to below 6

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in 2007.

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, the number of

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per person in Sweden experienced a gradual rise from approximately 9

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to above 10

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. Surprisingly,

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trend did not

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and began to decline in the following year, which indicated 7

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in 1987, and below 6

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period. The United Kingdom

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experienced the same situation, which showed 11

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in the first year,

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experienced to fall until approximately 9

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carbon dioxide emissions
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United Kingdom
Sweden
Italy
Portugal
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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

Some people believe that if an individual behaves in an anti-social manner, such as committing a crime, then society is to blame. What are the causes of anti-social behavior? Who do you think is responsible?*

Task 1 You have seen an advertisement for part-time job at a restaurant and want to apply for it. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: -describe your experience -tell him why you are interested in the job -say why you think you would be suitable for the job

In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their families and friends. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries, traditional dress and costumes are considered effective ways of maintaining links with the past. How effective can traditional costumes be, in this sense? What other ways exist to help citizens connect with a country’s past?

Today, many people use the internet and smartphones to transfer money to friends, family, and businesses. Do you think it is a negative or positive development?