Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Success in work has many ways, some people have chosen to work in big companies,
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others have tried to do it by themselves. There are many disadvantages for them when they want to be self-employed. In
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from start-up.
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, most self-employed people who are of the younger generation usually tried to be a start-up whilst they were are not a great person. They do not have enough
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to manage or develop an idea for
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case, it is easy for them to become bankrupt or in debt.
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, the founder Khoi Nguyen with the WeFit trademark which is an application on smartphones to
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customers with Gym, Yoga, Boxing and Zumba to save time and money.
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app was not attractive enough to
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customers, so they did not use it, and .
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, it was removed from the google store.
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, some self-employed people are studying from some great person or following a trend,
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they don't have enough
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unsuccessful.
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Nguyen Hoang Hiep, 28 years old, comes from Khanh Hoa province,
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. Hiep followed the trend “give up
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, go back
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”, he has given up a job with a high salary in the city, more than 20 million
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his study was on economics,
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his choice was on organic farming in agriculture to do. He didn't have enough
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and
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to control diseases. So, he has failed consecutively and lost
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to recover his work.
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to unsuccessful cases, some of the self-employed
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become a businessman by their will and help.
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Nguyen Thanh Dong, who is the son of the director of a company in Hanoi city, wants to start-up
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30 hectares Mint farm by himself in Ninh Thuan province.
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he
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has troubles with management and control of his farm, but his parents have strong support
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financial capital. With the support from his family, he tries to study more experts on agriculture and import more new technologies to build his farm . He tried to find more partners who are especially good at selling in other countries to sign contracts. And now, he is a big Mint exporter in Vietnam and his products are exported to many countries
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Japan, Korea, China and India. In general, if anyone wants to be a self-employed or successful startup person,
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should be thought about
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process. It’s not only to have enough
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, experience, passion, etc. but it’s
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needed a good financial
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and know how to sell their products to the customers.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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