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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK,divided into 3 categories ,from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK,divided into 3 categories ,from 1995-2002.
#minutes #billions #telephone #uk #categories
A glance at the chart provided reveals some information about telephone calls that
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in to
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 3 different kinds of call
type
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,between 1995 and 2002 in the UK. One
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point
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that
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highlighted
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 by the figure is that
,
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during
this
 period local-fixes line was considerably higher than other types of
phone
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call
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calls
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 just with some fluctuation between somewhere in the vicinity of 72
minutes
 to 90
minutes
 between 1995 and 2002 in the UK. The second important call was related to National and
international-fixed
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line
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.
This
 number has slightly increased with at
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least
of
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35
minutes
 call in 1995 to the maximum call,which was just a low of 60
minutes
 in 2002.
According to
 the chart,making telephone
call
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 with mobiles(all calls) had striking similarities in its trend with national and international-call.Mobiles
also
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rose during
this
 period from less than 5
minutes
 in 1995 to a peak of 45
minutes
 in 2002.
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