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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

#future #nobody #wiil #newspapers #books
current
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 generation can access everything online ,
such
 as education, buy online, keep in touch, and read electronic
newspapers
 and
magazines
, so some believe that nobody won't pay to buy printed
newspapers
 or
magazines
. I partially agree with it.
Read
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books
 or
magazines
 is a favourite
works
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 of some
people
. they read
book
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books
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 or
newspapers
everyday
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 and
aware
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 of
news
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through
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this
 way. in recent years online
books
 or
magazines
 develop worldwide and many
people
 tend to use them
instead
 of printed
books
. be available is one reason
,
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because you can access many
books
 or
magazines
 or
newspapers
, just by
click
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 on a website. it's really easy for each person who reads them. in each city or village, you can read any
newspapers
 or
books
 which you like and
also
 download them in a short
of
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time.
moreover
to
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 be easy
of
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to
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 archive online
books
 or
newspapers
 or
magazines
 is another reason that
people
 tend to use
of
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this
 method. in comparison
of
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to
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 printed
books
 and
newspapers
 and
magazines
,
archive
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an archive
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 of online
books
 or
newspapers
 are extremely easy. they are stored in a small CD or flash
driver
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. in
fact
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 we can store a large volume of them
in
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on
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 a CD ,
as a
result
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,result
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 we can
quick
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 access
to
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previous content and
also
 it takes up little space to compare printed
newspapers
 and
books
 which occupy an enormous space.
for
instance
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 I had read mehrnameh magazine for ten years and had decided to keep all of them but it would
occupied
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 all of my room space ,
therefore
 I Member to its website , paid money and download all of them and now
in
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on
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 my
computer
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 I have all versions of
this
magazines
 without they're occupying any physical volume.
on the other
hand
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 some
people
 have
difficult
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difficulty
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to read
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reading
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 electronic
newspapers
 or
books
 because they should stare at
monitor
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the monitor
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 for hours and it causes
they
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them
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complain
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 of eye strain and blurred vision ,
in
addition
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stare
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 at
monitor
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 irritated their
eye
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eyes
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. so they like to read printed
newspapers
 and
magazines
 or
books
 in place of online
books
.
for
example
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 my uncle has eye strain and
concentrate
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 on a screen is too
trouble
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troublesome
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 for him
as a consequence
 he read printed
books
.
to sum up
 ,
however
 staring at a monitor is difficult but I personally believe that to be available and to be easy for archive cause that many
people
 won't read printed
books
 or
newspapers
 in the future so I partially agree with
this
 issue.
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