Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made

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Many manufactured food and drink
products
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contain
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high
level
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of
sugar
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, which causes many
health
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problems. specialists believe that the sugary
products
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prices
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should
increase
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to encourage
people
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to consume less
sugar
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. I totally agree with
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idea. these days eating food or drinking sugary
products
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increase
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among
people
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and it causes many diseases and problems among them. Increasing their
prices
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is a method to avoid
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them.
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idea has two great reasons.
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of ,all it leads to
reduce
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diseases among
people
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who consume sugary
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,
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because to be expensive of them cause
people
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to buy fewer
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owing to as an economic aspect it doesn't economically viable
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people
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's consumption of sugary
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decreases plus some diseases
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as diabetes eliminate among them and
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they less pay for
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issues.
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according to
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harward university research, after increasing
prices
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of sugary
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in United States between 1995 to 2005 , the number of
people
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who has diabetes decreased 15 per cent.
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addition
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grow
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food or drink
prices
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which have much
sugar
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can change
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people
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
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procedure causes
people
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change
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their eating habits and tend to consume healthy foods or drinks which have less
sugar
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,
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it leads to
increase
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health
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and
reduced
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in
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obesity among
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at
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different ages. for ,
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I have a cousin who lives in Swiss. he used to buy sugary drinks a lot and it caused
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became
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overweight. After the government established a rule which increased sugary drinks price, he changed his eating habits and could decrease his weight. in conclusion ,
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be expensive
of
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sugary
products
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lead to
increase
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health
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and change in lifestyle and eating habits among
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which
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both
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of
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are beneficial for
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the individual
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and
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for society.
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