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Some people think paying taxes is enough while others think as part of the society they have more responsibility. Discuss both sides and present your views in this writing task

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It is indisputable fact that a lot of
people
 ponder
to
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whether to
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 give
taxes
 sufficiently based on their affordability and opinion about incompetent
tax
 collectors.
Whereas
, others argue on its mindset to give more
due to
tax
culture
.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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both views and the
writer
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writer's
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argue
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argument
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 in
favor
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favour
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 of the latter. Some
people
 apply the “
tax
culture
” action. They ponder that higher
tax
 means higher funds for the development of infrastructure, health systems and education. In
this
 case,
people
 believe with the national authorities to expand the infrastructure of the country,
instead
 of wasting
the
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money
for
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unresponsibility
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un responsibility
 actions, like corruption. To illustrate
this
, 45% population in the United States pay
taxes
 to the government, resulting in the improvement of
the
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building, and free
of
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health services.
This
also
consequence
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 in
the
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high
satisfactory
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 among
people
 in the country.
On the other hand
, other
population
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populations
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 might afford the
tax
 sufficiently because of the poor annual earnings among
population
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the population
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. In detail, there are a lot of
people
 who have low income or “underground economic”,
thus
people
 pay
taxes
 in order to
fulfill
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 the task only.
In addition
,
people
 do not believe
with
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 the national authorities because of their incompetent behaviour.
For instance
,
tax
 collectors manipulate the figure of
taxes
 and evade
taxes
.
As a consequence
,
tax payers
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taxpayers
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 demotivated and defiant about
taxes
,
this
also
reducing
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 the possibility of
tax
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a tax
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culture
 and considering
taxes
 as a burden. In my
opion
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opinion
, the government should monitor the process of
taxes
 and give severe punishment for
people
 who abuse the money to create
tax
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a tax
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culture
habit
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habits
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.
To sum up
,
people
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some people
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 think the
tax
culture
 should be applied because of the advantages,
while
 others
opion
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opinion
on
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in
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their
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the
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 affordability and unresponsibility of
tax
 collectors.
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