Some believe that sport competitions are a source of emotional stress for young people. Therefore, youth should be banned from participating in sport competitions. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Sports
activities are part and parcel of human
life
. Recently It is argued
by
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some thinkers that game tournaments are detrimental to adults for their mental health,and they should be banned from
such
competitions.From my point of view there are several benefits ,especially physical exercises and a winning tendency
keeps
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their body and mind active and energetic
Hence
disagree with the statement. With regards to their physical health,
due to
the advancement of technology , Teenagers have engaged by watching Television or browsing the internet during their leisure hours.To achieve high scores and for their academic ,future they are busy in the study either at the coaching centre.They show less interest in games and
sports
,
Hence
they get sick,
On the other hand
, At various
level
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,
the
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sports
competition brings some energy and dynamism to the young's minds. To win the position and ranking in games they do continuous physical exercise. They are away from disease.At the Psychic level there the winning tendency brings so much pride in
life
. When a player wins a tournament and
become
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champion, that moment of happiness can not be described in words. the team
spirt
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spirit
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and leading the
tem
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team
in the
tunaments
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tournaments
tournament
gives both
life
skill
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.
Through the
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games and
sports
organised
in
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world
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the world
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level gives name fame,prestige,
money
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and money
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to a player.
Last
time Indian cricket captain Mr Dhoni's leadership
own
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won
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the twenty twenty world cup and gave so much
proud
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to the nation. In conclusion,Undoubtedly ,in the game competition,lack of physical and mental exercise and challenges
taken
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by adults are detrimental to their health,In my ,
opinion
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they should be engaged more and more in
sports
activities so that they will be named, famous,learning team spirit and earn money which will give them a better
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emotional stress
  • Young athletes
  • High-pressure environments
  • Resilience
  • Discipline
  • Teamwork
  • Supportive coaching
  • Adequate rest
  • Personal growth
  • Structured competition
  • Goals
  • Manage failure
  • Celebrate achievements
  • Personal development
  • Mental health
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