The diagram shows how apple is canned. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant. Write at elast 150 words.
The given diagram illustrates the process that brings to apples' canning.
This
procedure consists in several phases that take place in both open and closed spaces.
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Firstly
, the Linking Words
apple
is collected by farmers that pick it up from the tree by hands. Use synonyms
Then
, the Linking Words
apple
is transported by a truck to the factory. Once it arrives, the fruit is washed and immidiately Use synonyms
after
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this
, its quality is tested, so that the farmers know wheater it is a good and valid product. Next step is cold storing, a phase in which the Linking Words
apple
's temperature is measured. Another value Use synonyms
that is
needed is the weight: the Linking Words
apple
is put on a scales and compared to a fixed unit. After being measured, the Use synonyms
apple
is peeled, so its skin is removed, and Use synonyms
then
chopped in slices.
Canning is the next action involved in the process: the Linking Words
apple
is put in spacious cans of glass that are Use synonyms
then
sealed. Once we are at Linking Words
this
point of the procedure, the passage of sterilizing occurs. In order to sterilize the fruit, the cans containing it are boild in a huge cauldron. When it is ready, the labels are attached to the cans. After labelling, the containers are stored and Linking Words
finally
they can be dispatched!Linking Words
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words apple with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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