Some people say that adversiting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often held that one of the most persuasive elements of shaping
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habits and making them from
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is
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.
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some
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consider that numerous and countless amount of advertisement distracts
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and no longer plays their role
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bringing new customers and
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tend to neglect them.
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essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in the favour of latter. On the one hand, advertisement is extremely successful at persuading
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to buy things because nowadays we live in
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amount of individuals have using and
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time on social media platforms.
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, digital
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are very effective because of their reachability.
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, when someone searches “table” in Google, it first shows various
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about tables and even though that individual doesn’t need a table, The
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press
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to buy it.
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, some
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think that so many
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are annoying and distracting because they are everywhere.
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, when you watch YouTube videos, the platform shows
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every 5 minutes and that’s extremely bizarre to some folks.
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, individuals with that attitude ignore those
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and
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them implausible and undependable on the whole advertising industry. In my opinion, too many
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are distracting and useless, which leads me to ignore them.
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Advertisements
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main purpose is to ease up the process of buying things, not
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the process.
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, despite the fact that the
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have been effective, they should be kept within bounds.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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