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People often find it difficult to adapt to new situations in their lives. WHy do you think this is? What measures can you suggest to make it easier?

#people #situations #lives #measures
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people
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is
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hard to
adopt
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them
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for
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 the changing situations during their
existences
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. There are
also
 some suggestions I will recommend. The first recommendation is
people
 need to try themselves in
the
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difficult situations more often
,
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 because
people
 used to live in the comfort conditions.
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 they need
leave
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 their comfort zone, but they don’t
need
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 do that in one moment, step by step.
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, if someone always goes
in
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 one shop every day, he should try to go to other shops, for meeting new citizens. The second
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 is
do
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 any sport, actually doing sports helps us to feel better and more convinced in ourselves, and the main benefit of it
that
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 you are preparing your body and mind for heavier and more difficult exercises every training.
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,
do
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 gym 3 times a week can improve not only your physical health
also
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mental
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,
due to
 always leaving your comfort zone. The final idea
how
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 to be ready for fast changing life is
believe
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to believe
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 in yourself, there is an excellent solution
for
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to
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resolve
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this
 problem. I
completely
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 convinced that
,
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people
 must be more self-esteem. You may do some exercises to improve that skill, like
the
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reading special books
as
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 Dale Carnegie or often
go
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 to events where you don’t know anyone or almost anyone and go to know them. In conclusion, there
are
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 some
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advises
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advice
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how
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 to make ready
people
 for changes in their lives. The most general proposal is
people
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 desire to resolve their problems.
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