The pie graph below shows how electricity is produced in Ireland and the table shows the primary reasons for using electricity in the same country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie graph below shows how electricity is produced in Ireland and the table shows

the primary reasons for using electricity in the same country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
This
pie depicts how electricity is produced in Ireland and the table shows the primary reasons for using energy products in the same region. It clear from the graph
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Ireland.
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we can see
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same
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proportion
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% in the same country.
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the important things
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by local is goal and gas.
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whereas
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people
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • fossil fuels
  • renewable energy
  • efficiency
  • environmental impact
  • residential sector
  • industrial sector
  • commercial sector
  • trends
  • changes over time
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