The pie graph below shows how electricity is produced in Ireland and the table shows the primary reasons for using electricity in the same country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
pie depicts how electricity is produced in Ireland and the table shows
the primary reasons for using energy products in the same region.
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