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in today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both the parents to work. while some believe that children in these families benefit from the additional income, other believe that they feel lack of support because of their parents' absence. discuss both the views and give your opinion. give reasonable answer and include any example from your own experience.

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There is no denying that in today's modern society is
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important
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apropriate
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appropriate
 income to provide
for
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children
suitable
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 and
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convenient
 environment.
Recent
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 years it has been
debate
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 with some arguing that both
parents
 should contribute to the family's budget,
while
 others argue that a shortage of attention to
children
 can have a detrimental effect
in
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 fostering. In
this
 essay, I will explore both
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sides
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point view
 and provide my opinion. On the one
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 it is essential to have enough income to provide
stable
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 financial situation and
finest
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 nutrition for
children
. As practise shows
children
which
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who
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 foster in
supportive
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the supportive
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 and wealthy
family
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families
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 are more likely
succeed
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 owing to
they
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their
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have
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 more opportunities to get
good
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a good
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 education and more
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qualified
 teachers
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educate
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 them.
For
example
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 it is well-established that good education costs a lot of money and to have numerous tutors
parents
 need to have enough money to pay bills for
this
.
On the other
hand
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 there is
downside
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the downside
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of
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 engaging both
parents
 in work.
Due to
 having a lot of hours of working adults can't dedicate enough quantity of
time
 to their scions. As
result
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inresult
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 it can have
harmful
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a harmful
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 impact on
children
 namely
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anxiety
 and stress. Significantly important to spend
time
 with
children
 for their
wellbeing
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well-being
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 and to avoid their frustration.
For
example
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parents
 can spend their
time
 with their
offsprings
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offspring
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in
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at
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 the weekends by attending some events
such
 as football matches or playing with them some board games at home. Spending joint leisure
time
in
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at
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 the weekends can be enough to provide
children
good
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with good
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 enough attention. In conclusion,
undobtedly
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undoubtedly
parent's
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parents'
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 incomes play a pivotal role in the shaping of
future
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the future
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 of
children
.
However
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 in a
meantime
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 it is worth
to remember
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remembering
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 that
parents
 should allocate their
time
 to interact with their scions.
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