Many people play video games as a main way to entertain. Do the advantages of playing video games outweigh the disadvantages?

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Playing video

games

has become the most interesting entertainment

amoung

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among

children

as well as

adults.In some ,

circumstanses

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circumstances

it might seem beneficial but it has numerous disadvantages on it.

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essay will discuss

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positive and negative outcomes of playing video

games

Firstly

,digital

games

assist people to get relief from work stress and mental pressure and some studies revealed that playing

games

via mobile and computer significant positive impact on mental stress and work pressure.,

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there are many puzzle

games

available in digital format which helps learners to understand new things in a fun way because physical learning might get boring when taking loan time but if it comes in the form of digital

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would make tried

while

learning. It has some advantages

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it there are numerous disadvantages involving

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fristly

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firstly

,playing

games

easily makes people get addicted to it

such

as GTA

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humans especially children spend all their time

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playing it

subsequently

it badly

affect

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their studies.,

secondly

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world has experienced several suicide attempts was taken place during

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couple of years because

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lack of confidence.Digi

games

not only affects

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human beings mentally but

also

impact them physically.

for example

unconsciousness and sight problem are the most common problems that people

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encounter from playing digital

games

. In the conclusion,electronic

games

are becoming the most dangerous thing in the modern world which cause

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

225 words

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Many people play video games as a main way to entertain. Do the advantages of playing video games outweigh the disadvantages?

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Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your houseflat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter, explain the reason for the noise apologise for the noise describe what action you will take

When we meet someone for the first time, we generally decide very quickly what kind of person we think they are and if we like them or not. Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

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