The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the industrial production process of
instant
noodles
.
Overall
, the manufacturing of instant
noodles
consists of eight stages and uses flour powder as a raw material. Moreover
, other ingredients such
as oil and water are added into the further
stages.
First of all, a great deal of flour is kept in the storage silos and transferred to the mixer. Then
, doughs are made by stirring oil, water and flour powder together until the mixture is completely well-mixed. After the following steps, to become noodle strips, the mixed dough is ground by the rollers to make it sheet-shaped and cut into several pieces. In order to store instant
noodles
in the containers, noodle strips are placed in the circle plate moulds and dehydrated by drying cooking with some oil at a high temperature to carry out the disc-shaped noodles
. Then
, instant
noodles
are stored in the cups along with
some vegetables and spice powder. Lastly
, the full cup of noodles
is labelled and ready to be sold.Submitted by jeanbabyfrog on
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