Some people think that children nowadays have too much freedom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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some
people
think that
children
are getting
much
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apply
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freedom
.
This
situation we cannot control our
children
in
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at
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this
time. Parents should give
the
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partial
freedom
can give to
the
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children
. In my
opinion
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I
am disagree
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disagree
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about
this
content. If we are giving more
freedom
children
will
be
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go for the negative parts, They are
possibly
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will go for the different types of addictions like alcohol,drugs etc...,And they
are get
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are getting
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individual times they will go with friends and
enjoying
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with them. They are irresponsible
persons
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people
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in their
life
.
Some how
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there
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their
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future will be very
badly
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bad
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and become increased negative sides.
Children
should be responsible
with
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parents. They should
incredible
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have incredible
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children
and live the ideal
people
. We should have to improve
there
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confidence and can give good
life
.
In
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the Other
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,
some times
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sometimes
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we
are give
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are given
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freedom
to our
child
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children
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they have to enjoy
there
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their
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life
without any
responsible
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response
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. If they are developing
there
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their
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confidence and go
some where
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somewhere
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to
travell
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travel
and will get
lot
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a lot
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of knowledge from the world. They can get new opportunities
from
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there
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their
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free
life
. In our country not accepting to give more
freedom
to
the
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children
.Because our culture is like to grow under with the parents. They are giving more good ideas to the
children
.
Mostly
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children
are not
intrested
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interested
to
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for
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the individual
life
.present situation
children
mostly
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are mostly
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interested to get
free
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life
. But our country
people
are not allowed like
this
contion
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content
condition
. In
conclusion
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people
mostly disagree to give
the
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more
freedom
for
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to
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children
. Because in Indians
not
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are not
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given more
free
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freedom
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to
there
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their
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children
. We cannot more individual situations cannot give our child to get affected the negative situations.
W e
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should give
a
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incredible Shildon for
future
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to avoid more
freedom
from there.
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