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Some students prefer to take a gap year between highschool and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the present day, a lot of youths consider
to take
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 a gap
year
 after high school and university since there are many
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 benefits to themselves. I believe that the advantages of
such
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outweight
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outweigh
 the drawbacks and will discuss
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 the essay. First of all, the positive aspect of taking a
year
 off is that students could have time to explore their preferences. Many children
deceide
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decide
 to study
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what they do not interested
.
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As a result
, they have to transfer to another major or university.
Therefore
, it would be better to know what you are really interested in before taking any decision. Another plus point is that youths could learn various things aside from study courses.
For example
, they could work as a cashier or waiter. Meanwhile, they could talk to many customers and learn
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 cultures, languages and their story experiences.
Although
,
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 taking a gap
year
 have a lot of benefits, it
also
 has a downside. One of
major
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 negative aspects is that they might be left behind
from
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 their
freinds
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friends
.
For instance
, those friends
many
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may
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talk
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 or interested in some things that you can not catch up or they might talk about work and income
while
 you
are still be
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 a student. These might negatively affect
on
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gap
year
 students feeling. In conclusion,
this
 essay feels that taking a
year
 off has more pros than cons.
Therefore
, there is no reason why should not
taking
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 a
year
 off.
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