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The diagram show the process of recycling bottles

The diagram show the process of recycling bottles
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The diagram displays the way in which
glass
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bottles
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 are recycled.
Overall
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, it is easy to see that there are three main stages in
this
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 process, which
starts
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start
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 with gathering wasted
glass
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bottles
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 and ends with new
glass
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bottles
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 that are ready sold in the supermarket In the beginning, wasted
glass
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bottles
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 are collected and brought to the collection point. Following that, these
bottles
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 are transported by trucks. What people do in
the next step is
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 using high - pressure water, which aims to make these
bottles
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 cleaner. The next step occurs when
glass
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bottles
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 are classified
to
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into
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 a variety of colours
such
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 as brown, green or clear.
Next,
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glass
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bottles
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 undergo a step of break, which happened in the
glass
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 factory.
Subsequently
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,
glass
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 pieces are burned in a furnace from
600 degree
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600-degree
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 celsius to
800 degree
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800-degree
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 celsius, which leads to
new
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the new
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 liquid
glass
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 being made.
Then
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, the mixture is shaped in
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glass
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a glass
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 mould, which results in new
bottles
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 being made.
Lastly
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, the products are ready for sale in the supermarket.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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