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People believe that these days there is a general increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others. What might have caused this? How to improve this?

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Nowadays, some in society argue that there is a new trend in which people show less respect to each other and more and more tend to behave anti-socially.
This
 essay aims to investigate the causes of
this
as well as
 put forward some possible solutions. There are many reasons why there is a growth in anti-social behaviours.
Firstly
, social
media
 has encouraged
such
activities
.Some
activities
 that used to be taboo nowadays spoiled and people consider them as normal
activities
.TikTok,
for example
, is a sharing video platform in which people challenge each other by sharing images or videos which mostly contain disrespectful behaviours
such
 as playing jokes on elderlies ,
therefore
, as
such
 videos go viral they become more normal in society.
Secondly
,
Schools
 do not play their role in teaching children the principle of behaving properly in society. These days
schools
 mostly focus on subjects
such
 as science,
whereas
, in the past teaching principles like behaving or talking respectfully with elderlies was an important part of their curriculum. There are several ways to tackle these problems. First and foremost, social
media
 should be banned since it contains content that encourages anti-social
activities
. It is important for the government to limit access to some of these platforms,
although
 it should be done by enacting some rules that do not limit people`s right to access the internet .
Last
 but not least,
schools
 should play their role in teaching students how to recognise social and anti-social
activities
. Squeezing some curriculums which teach them how to improve their social communication or encourage them to behave in a proper way is of great importance. In conclusion ,even though Social
media
 has eradicated taboos in the community ,at the same time
schools
 have negatively contributed to
this
 trend. I believe these problems can be solved provided that the public is encouraged to use less social
media
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