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Learning at university would be more effective if men and women were educated separately. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #men #women
It is thought that the allocation of men and women to different
classes
 would be more beneficial for
the
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education quality. I mostly disagree with
this
 suggestion because of its social and educational drawbacks
on
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 university
students
.
Firstly
, separated
classes
 may allow some problems
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students
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 their social skills. In separated
classes
,
students
 may be more comfortable and
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 in their speech and attitude.
However
, in the long term, it would give negative impacts
to
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 their personality. To illustrate that, men may become much ruder and women may become much shier gradually. Both genders may forget how to behave their cross genders in time. They lose
their
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times
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 to recover their attitudes and social relationships in
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society. In short, because
of
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social relationships have a part of
the
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education in
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universities,
this
 idea may create negative results.
Secondly
,
conversely
 to
this
 suggestion, these allocated
classes
 may lead to
decrease
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 studying quality among
students
.
This
 is because
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in mixed
classes
, both genders share and discuss their ideas
hence
, their discussions
more
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 versatile and informative than the separated
classes
.
For example
, women’s point of view would be different
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 men’s about
the
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climate change or caring
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orphaned children.
Although
, it would be not important in the scientific branches, usually different
these
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ideas and
discussion
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 are needed
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 of university studies.
Thus
, separated
classes
 erect a barrier to the cross genders’ idea
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. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied with
this
 suggestion.
Although
,
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 separated
classes
 might provide a
slight
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in
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 scientific studies, in my opinion,
this
 idea would show detrimental impacts
in
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students
’ behaviour and education.
Submitted by metehancakiroglu3435 on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • single-gender education
  • coeducational
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • social dynamics
  • learning styles
  • cognitive differences
  • participation rates
  • diverse workplaces
  • educational outcomes
  • psychological implications
  • empirical evidence
  • inclusivity
  • reinforcement of gender roles
  • gender-segregated
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