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Some people think that acess to internet is necessary to live a full life ? do you agree or disagree?

#people #acess #internet #life
Internet
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 has been a cornerstone in our daily
life
 for the
last
 decade. For a
pelthora
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plethora
 of
reasons
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people
 got attached to what the
internet
 has to offer in an
exessive
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 manner to the point that they
relay
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rely
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 on it for
living
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a living
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. I believe that
this
 is the era of artificial intelligence and
internet
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 ,and it is a crucial part
for
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 our
living
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,
however
, we should limit the use to the benefits that we can take from it. In the following
essay
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 my point of view will be
further
 explained.
Firstly
, access to
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the network
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network
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 has helped embrace connections and communications, before it was hard to get in touch with family members who were living abroad and
connecting
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 with
people
 from different places globally to make friendships, and the
internet
 solved the issue for
people
 who suffered from the lack of connection,
for instance
, nowadays,
people
 tend to connect with their family, friends and educators online all the time which gives them a sense of support and community , so what could be said that the
internet
 is a connectivity tool that could not be replaced.
Furthermore
,
life
's two major components; education and work,
relay
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rely
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 on the existence of the
internet
; companies are switching to remote work when
people
 get to work from home online and school has created platforms to supply students with the needed material online rather than on campus and giving them lectures online too,
for example
, in the pandemic, in 2020, the vast majority of universities gave
lectues
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lectures
 via zoom to their learners which
was
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 and still
is
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 of a superior benefit to students with health conditions or even regular students who prefer the online mood of studying,
therefore
, some
people
 are gaining their income using the
internet
 ,and others, their education in critical times.
To conclude
, the
internet
 has significant benefits that could not be denied despite its negative impact,
in
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life
's major things; connecting, communicating, working and learning, and I agree that it is an important aspect of living in the current era
,
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 since it impacts
life
's trends on daily basis.
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