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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 number of
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 migrants are presented all over the world.
Although
 it is sometimes thought that, educated
professionals
 should serve their
country
,
while
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others argue that, every individual
have
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right
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the right
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 to choose their working location. In my opinion, I believe that every worker should be able to select their professional
work place
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.
First
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 it is essential to note that everyone has
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the responsibility
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responsibility
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 to pay back
taxpayed
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taxpayer
 people, by facilitating them using their skills.
In addition
,
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 portion of
money
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 from their budget is reserved for tertiary education in most
of
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the
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countries, because they believe
on
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 skilled
professionals
 who can
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economy
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the economy
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 of the
country
.
For example
, Sri Lanka which is still
developing
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country
is
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reserved
one third
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 of
their
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 national budget for education.
Therefore
, every individual has
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 to
work
some
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 years for their own
country
 which helped them to become
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a skillful
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skillful
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, educated human
being
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beings
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.
On the other hand
, everyone has
right
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 to experience
deferent
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 social and cultural backgrounds.
Therefore
, they can compete and find a place in
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the international
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 job market which drives them to
work
 with multicultural
professionals
.
As a result
, they are offered
with
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a background
which
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 they can gain multiple learning and professional states. Another vital consideration is earnings, which can have
,
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 when serving
to
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other countries. To be more precise, as skilled
professionals
, they earn
limited
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a limited
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 amount of
money
 by
work
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working
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 in their own
country
.
For example
, as a registered doctor in Sri Lanka, one of my friends earns 1000USD per month, but in
United
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 States of America offers 5000USD per month for him. Thereby,
professionals
,
for
instance
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 doctors and engineers should have
right
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 to value their skills throughout the globe to earn
significant
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a significant
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amount
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amounts
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 of
money
 which leads to
comfortable
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a comfortable
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 lifestyle .
Hence
, it is notable that every
persons
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has
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have
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right
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the right
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 to receive
good
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a good
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 sum of
money
 and
work place
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workplace
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 selection
right
 should
also
 be offered
for
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to
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 them. In conclusion,
while
 people may vary in their opinion, I strongly believe it is not compulsory to
work
 in the
country
 which
some one
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someone
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 studied because they should have
chance
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 to not only experience various social backgrounds but
also
 they have
freedom
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the freedom
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 to earn
reasonable
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a reasonable
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 amount of
money
 which drives them to
luxurious
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a luxurious
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 life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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