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Cooking food at home is a waste of time. Fast food restaurants help in living a modern and less stressful life.

#food #home #waste #time #restaurants #life
Some people have the notion that preparing
food
in
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home
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 is
time consuming
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, and these junk
food
 restaurants allow us to eat contemporary
food
 and
decreases
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decrease
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 stress in life. I completely disagree with
afore mentioned
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 statement.
This
 essay will substantiate my views with relevant examples followed by the conclusion.
To begin
 with, fast
food
 is the major source
for
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 numerous diseases,
such
 as obesity, diabetes, cancer, ulcer, etc. To elaborate,
this
food
 contains unhealthy cholesterol,
as a result
 of over usage of oil, and other ingredients used for taste.
In addition
,
in
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outside
food
 stalls do not have proper sanitation
while
 cooking
food
,
as well as
 chefs who cook
food
 in these
food
 courts do not properly clean themselves before cooking.
For instance
, in day-to-day
news
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 there is
a news
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news
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 like some students in one school affected by nausea or other illnesses
due to
 eating
of
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food
 in
neighboring
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neighbouring
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food
 stalls around the school.
Furthermore
, these
food
 commodities are extravagant when compared to
food
in
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at
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home
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.
Besides
, going to restaurants far from
home
 is pretty
time consuming
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 rather
cooking
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than cooking
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in
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at
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home
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the home
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.
Moreover
, these
streets
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food
 stalls are the major reason for the disposable waste, so these are not friendly to the environment.
For example
, in my
home
 if we cook
food
, it is very cheap,
as well as
 it provides some
time
 to do
another
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 work,
whereas
 if we eat outside, it is expensive and it takes so much
time
.
To conclude
, eating these fast foods leads to devastating diseases and these require more money
as well as
time consuming
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, I believe people should restrict themselves
eating
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from eating
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of
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fast
food
,
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