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Cooking food at home is a waste of time. Fast food restaurants help in living a modern and less stressful life.

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Some people have the notion that preparing
food
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in
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home
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 is
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time consuming
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, and these junk
food
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 restaurants allow us to eat contemporary
food
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 and
decreases
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 stress in life. I completely disagree with
afore mentioned
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 statement.
This
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 essay will substantiate my views with relevant examples followed by the conclusion.
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 with, fast
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 is the major source
for
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 numerous diseases,
such
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 as obesity, diabetes, cancer, ulcer, etc. To elaborate,
this
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food
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 contains unhealthy cholesterol,
as a result
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 of over usage of oil, and other ingredients used for taste.
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,
in
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outside
food
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 stalls do not have proper sanitation
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 cooking
food
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,
as well as
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 chefs who cook
food
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 in these
food
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 courts do not properly clean themselves before cooking.
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, in day-to-day
news
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 there is
a news
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 like some students in one school affected by nausea or other illnesses
due to
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 eating
of
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food
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 in
neighboring
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neighbouring
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food
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 stalls around the school.
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, these
food
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 commodities are extravagant when compared to
food
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in
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at
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home
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.
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, going to restaurants far from
home
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 is pretty
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time consuming
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 rather
cooking
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than cooking
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in
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at
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home
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the home
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, these
streets
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food
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 stalls are the major reason for the disposable waste, so these are not friendly to the environment.
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, in my
home
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 if we cook
food
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, it is very cheap,
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 it provides some
time
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 to do
another
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 work,
whereas
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 if we eat outside, it is expensive and it takes so much
time
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.
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, eating these fast foods leads to devastating diseases and these require more money
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time consuming
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time-consuming
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, I believe people should restrict themselves
eating
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from eating
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of
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fast
food
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,

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