Some people feel that playing computer games has a negative impact on children's health and social skills. Others say that it has a positive impact. Discuss both views.

The phenomenon of
children
playing computer
games
may affect their health and communication skills has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
this
issue in question may be, I personally believe that playing computer
games
with proper methods would bring them benefits. On one hand, some people argue that
children
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at the screen for a long time would have
negative
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impact
to
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their health.
For example
, many
children
would like to stay at home and play video
games
rather than go out for
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or
societing
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society
.
However
, our body without stretching, the
ricks
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of getting diseases will be increased.
Also
, less
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out with peers would impair their abilities to
communicat
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communicate
since social skills usually require some practice to remind the same level.
On the other hand
, other people say computer
games
would improve
children
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health and social skills. It is because some
games
require
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the player
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player
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to move their body to finish
specify
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mission
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in the
games
, and
two
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or more
player
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players
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to play at the same time, which means
children
can train their
body
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and talk with their friends in order to have the same result
such
as play football or others sports with peers.
In addition
, parents can force their
children
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games
only with
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english
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interface. So, they can learn
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when they are in the
games
. Under
this
line of thinking, it seems to me that different types of
games
would have different
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to
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children
.
Therefore
, parents would select those
games
that can bring their kids some positive impact.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Obesity
  • Social Isolation
  • Aggression
  • Academic performance
  • Gaming addiction
  • Cognitive skills
  • Problem-solving
  • Stress relief
  • Cultural awareness
  • Social interaction
  • Multitasking
  • Virtual worlds
  • Hand-eye coordination
  • Teamwork
  • Digital literacy
  • Innovative technology
  • E-sports
  • Moderation
  • Parental supervision
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