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The chart below give information on Internet use at home in Australia between 2011 and 2011 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The charts illustrate the
use
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 of the
Internet
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 by Australian people at home in the period from 2010 to 2011 and compare three purposes they
use
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 it for including social networking, paying bills online or online banking, and emailing.
Overall
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, emailing was the highest purpose of
Internet
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use
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 in Australia.
Besides
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, it seemed that the younger the citizens are, the more they
use
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 the
Internet
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 for social networking From the first chart, it can be clearly seen that in the mentioned period of time, nearly 100% of all people connected to the
Internet
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 to send and receive emails,
while
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 about 60% of them install Wi-fi modems for social networking and "paying bills online or online banking". When it comes to social networking, figures dropped gradually
according to
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 what age they are in. The number was above 20% in
groups
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 65 or over but was more fourfold in
groups
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 15-24. In terms of paying bills or online banking, the same pattern was shown, except for one exception of
groups
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 15-24 with 40% of the customers.
Last
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, the data for emailing was 80% for all age
groups
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, internet, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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