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You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged

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Dear Nelly, Sorry, it is taken me so long to write to you but at
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 I decided to own up to my mistake and explain why I haven’t returned your new
laptop
 yet. Unfortunately, I haven’t been able to return your
laptop
 to you because it got damaged during my presentation
last
 week. To be honest, I have delayed writing
this
 letter to you because I’ve
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 dreadfully guilty about it all knowing that it was a
brand new
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laptop
. I am so very sorry. Let me
explain
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 you what happened, everything went well with the presentation until just near the end when I got completely flustered. At that time I was concentrating so much on what I was saying that I accidentally knocked my cup of coffee which
spilled
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 all over your
laptop
. Since
then
, your
laptop
 has not worked properly even though I have restarted it a number of times. As the
laptop
 just will not work properly I decided to send it to a specialist I know. Actually, I’ve already talked to him and he assures me that it will be as good as new by Wednesday next week which will be in
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 your online class that you start on Thursday. Of course, I will cover all costs. I can’t apologize enough but what’s happened, but please know that it will all get sorted. I hope you can forget me. Best wishes. Robert
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