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Some people say that distance learning is a quick and effective way to study. Others, however, disagree and say that distance learning programs can never be as good as courses taken in person. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#people #distance #study #programs #courses #person
The pandemic has
thought
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taught
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 us to adapt to difficult situations and changed the way we live and
study
. Distance-learning
program
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programs
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is
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are
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 one of the products of the pandemic situation, it’s a common thing for us nowadays. The
study
 material is posted through the internet, and we can join the learning process from afar, with no need to go to the classroom in person. I strongly agree that distance learning
program
 is a brilliant finding to the education system.
Firstly
, the
program
is creating
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 an opportunity for everyone to
study
, no matter where they
lived
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live
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. The
student
 or expecting
student
 does not need to be in the same country or region as the institution,
such
 as a college or university. They can follow the learning process from wherever they are without worrying
to be
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 left out or missing the studying process.
For example
, my friend is in Indonesia, and he is currently taking a Master's
study
 in Australia, all of his classes are online and he can follow the Master's
program
 from his home in Indonesia. The
study
 materials are posted on
google classroom
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Google Classroom
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 and the
study
 report is submitted online via email or Google Drive.
Secondly
, the
program
is encouraged
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encourages
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cost
-effectiveness, either for the institution or the students. It helps the institution to reduce the learning
cost
.
For example
, the billing
cost
 of electricity and water is declining, because their
student
 and
lecturer
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lecturers
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 are not
applied
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present in person in the classroom. For the students, the transportation and/or rent
cost
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costs
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is
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are
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 declining. They don’t need to go to their college to follow the lecturing session and for the foreign
student
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student,
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 they don’t have to spend on apartment or dorm rent
cost
. In conclusion, the
program
 is beneficial for the learner and the institutions. It promotes flexibility and
cost
-effectiveness.
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Task Response
Your essay provides a clear response to the prompt, expressing strong agreement with the benefits of distance learning. Make sure to address any counterarguments as well for a more balanced argumentation.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is well-organized and follows a logical structure. Improve the clarity of your introduction and conclusion to better frame your main points for the reader.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • **Useful Vocabulary:**
  • 1. **Distance learning**: A way of studying where tuition is carried out over the Internet or other electronic media.
  • 2. **Flexible schedule**: Time-table that allows students to manage their own study hours.
  • 3. **Remote access**: The ability to access educational content from any location.
  • 4. **Cost-effective**: Economical; good value in relation to the money, time, or effort spent.
  • 5. **Digital literacy**: The ability to effectively use digital tools and platforms.
  • 6. **Self-discipline**: The ability to control one's behavior, emotions, and thoughts in the pursuit of long-term goals.
  • 7. **Hands-on experience**: Practical experience in a field of study, usually gained through physical participation.
  • 8. **Technological barriers**: Challenges related to the availability or use of technology.
  • 9. **Employer perception**: The way that employers view or regard a qualification or skill.
  • 10. **In-person interaction**: Face-to-face communication and engagement.
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