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Some people say that the government should make college free for people. Do you agree or disagree?

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Few
people
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 believe that the authorities should remove the tuition
fees
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of
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from
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the Institute
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Institute
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.I personally believe that government should free
fees
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 only for the
people
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 who had a financial
problem
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problems
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whereas
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 other
people
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 should pay their full tuition. To commence with, why it is important to pay the cost of education
firstly
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 in order to manage the activities of a college
Institute
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 a university needs a lot of cash and if we do not pay the tuition
fees
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 it will be difficult for the
institute
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 to manage the educational course .
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,in Medical
Institute
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 they had a lot of expenses like costly medicine and chemical and
this
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 expense was covered from the
fees
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 of a student.
besides
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 ,
that
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apply
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 by paying money for college we are more
concerns
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concerned
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 about our studies.
furthermore
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, these
fees
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also
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 benefit the tax system and
helps
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help
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 to increase the economy. Despite the
,
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fact fund is crucial for college to perform well but many
population
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populations
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 in our country do not get proper education .
due to
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 lack of capital and
therefore
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 a lot of
public
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the public
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 are unable to get
successful
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success
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 in their careers .
nevertheless
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, the government should introduce more and more scholarship program for the nation having financial issues but on an educational basis.since
,
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by introducing
scholarship
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a scholarship
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 program We Can attract more
people
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 who are good in Academics.To
examplify
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exemplify
,these days many colleges take a scholarship test and
according to
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 the score they give relaxation
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 their face student on their
fees
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. In conclusion,
although
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 institutes require a huge amount of money to run academic courses but had to support some minorities by relaxing their
fees
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.
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