Although there has been a large increase in the numbers of women who go out to work, women continue to do a disproportionate amount of housework and childcare. What can be done to promote greater equality between men and women between the home?

Recently the issue has been brought into focus is the unequal amount of household and childcare that
women
have to do. In my opinion, there is now greater equality between
men
and
women
in the family these days.
However
,
women
still tend to assume all the household chores
while
men
just only go to
work
causing gender inequality in the family. Now
i
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will discuss some solutions to address
this
situation and encourage better fairness between
men
and
women
in the family. One thing
that is
of great significance is that people should equally
dividing
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the household chores and
work
between males and females. The government
also
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responsible
limiting
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the working
time
for
the
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women
or dividing the
work
equally between two genders.
This
will exert a far-reaching influence on the equality
gender
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of gender
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. The most familiar example of
this
is offices should let
women
do light works and give female workers less
time
of
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work
to
coming
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back home early
for
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have more
time
taking
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care of their families and
childrens
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children
.
On the other hand
, it seems difficult to do if a man refuses to share or help his woman with housework. It
seem
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quite clear that many families should balance and share with each other between
works
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and personal lives. Another special consideration
in
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this
case is that
men
should do more
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the
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houseworks
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housework
house works
for their
woman
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women
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. There are many reasons for helping
women
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women's
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houseworks
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housework
. For one thing,
women
could have more square times to care for their
appearence
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appearance
. For another,
women
can allocate reasonable
time
for both
work
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at the office
as well as
at home. It may give rise to a number of
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that people will have abundant leisure to take care of their families and jobs. A better example of
this
can be best provided by
men
could
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do the laundry, clean the floor or
washing
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up in their square
time
to give a woman a hand.
Similarly
, if there are too
much
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domestic responsibilities,
women
can be more likely to experience stress,
as well as
lower
their
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effectively
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at
work
and
also
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their pay. It makes no difference that
men
have to give a hand to
women
in chores. In summary, it is important for tackled
the
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gender inequality in the family
and
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. We should take action to promote greater equality between
men
and
women
within the home.
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