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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
#show #household #expenditures #japan #malaysia #year
This
 pie chart
illustrate
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 the medium household spending
at
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in
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major
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the major
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 category in Japan and Malaysia in 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the acceptable spending
household
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in household
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 was compared with housing, transport,
food
 health care and other goods and services and
food
higher
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was higher
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 scored than other expenditures. But the percentage of health care
significantly
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 lower than others in
two
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the two
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 countries too. The percentages are measured in
pie
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a pie
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 chart. The rate of house spending demonstrated the highest in Malaysia. The rate of spending
food
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on food
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 in Malaysia was half of the figure for Japan. The rate
household
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of household
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 spending
other
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on other
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 goods and services and
food
 insensible pointed in two nations
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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