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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar diagram illustrates, the ratio of
people
 living in the
cities
 of the Global.
Overall
, 6 continents
such
 as
Africa
,
Asia
,
Europe
,
Latin
America
, North
America
, and
Oceania
 are present.
Africa
 and
Asia
 have almost
same
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the same
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 percentage
in
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from
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 the
year
 1950 to 2007.
However
,
Europe
,
Latin
America
 and
America
also
 have similar growth in the population living in
the
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apply
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urban areas. In ,
future
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the future
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 almost all
people
 will migrate to
cities
 in the coming years.
To begin
 with the
Year
 1950,
Africa
 and
Asia
 have
an almost equal proportions
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almost equal proportions
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 of
people
 living in
cities
.
That is
 15% in
Africa
 and 17% in
Asia
.
while
,
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Europe
 and
Latin
America
 have double the ratio compared to
Africa
 and
Asia
. It shows 51% and 42 % in the beginning
year
. There is only
2
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a 2
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% difference in the growth of North
America
 and
Oceania
. 64% in north
america
 and 62 % in
Oceania
. In the
year
 2007,
Africa
 has the least number.
Its
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It is
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 about 37% and
Asia
 and showing 41%.
furthermore
, There is
huge
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a huge
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 increase in the countries like
Europe
,
Latin
America
, North
America
 and
Oceania
, more than 50%
people
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of people
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 migrate to
cities
.
In addition
 to
this
. In the future years,
Africa
 and
Asia
 will cross 50 and about 62% of
Africa
 and 66%
in
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of
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Asia
 will settle in Urban areas. Rest all Contients will reach near
to
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90% in the future.
As a result
,
Europe
,
Latin
America
, North
America
 and
Oceania
 become
Over populated
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Overpopulated
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cities, africa, asia, europe, latin, america, oceania, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban areas
  • population density
  • economic development
  • historical urbanization
  • trends and outliers
  • urbanization levels
  • socio-economic implications
  • environmental impact
  • urban living
  • global trend
  • development strategies
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